Thursday 12 September 2013
Nikola's 100wc - week 2:
Dear diary I went fishing with my bold overjoyed busy dad. It was a beautiful quiet day but then suddenly my dad got a fish, I yelled "hooray Dad hooray" but my dad didn't answer! I walked closer and closer until I saw my dad lying on the ground blood was all over him then I seen the ugly, angry fish I got a sharp stick and whispered "your dead!"
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Good 100WC story, Nikola. You needed to include a few more commas in places and watch out spelling and grammar. Other than that it was good. It was a shame that the character's Dad was injured by the fish but I'm not surprised that they wanted revenge.
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- Dan
Wow Nikola that was a good 100wc I like the part when you said awesome
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