NEWSFLASH!!!
"Hello, this is CBBC news reporting on an orange tortoise running loose around the country! Across the pavement, this funny tortoise, who's collar exclaimed his name was Kevin, waved at everyone he went past! If you see this tortoise, please call 09585 218103 as soon as you can! That is the number of the animal rescue team."
"CUT!" shouted the director of the TV studio, waving his hand in the air. "It's the orange tortoise, with a knife!"
The tortoise came running into the room, and out of the shell came a spray-painted baby playing with a knife; that was the end of us. Bye bye, life...
By Lily B.
What an eccentric 100wc, Lily, and very well-written too! I enjoyed the way you set your story in a news room and you also used lots of punctuation very well too.
ReplyDeletePerhaps you could improve by looking at the ending - remember you don't need to squeeze an ending in there; just giving a snapshot of a story will work too!
Mr K :-)
Vivid imagination Lily!
ReplyDeleteHi Lily,
ReplyDeletewhat a fantastic setting for your story! I haven't seen an entry like this before! Keep up the great work :)