Gosh, your poor mum - I hope she was ok, Mia! I'm really pleased that you've included some great language and have also tried to use some more complicated punctuation like speech marks - well done! Mr K :-)
Fantastic writing Mia! Was really excited you included me in your story until i realised you had me killed off in the first few lines ;-) Keep up the hard work! Mum xx
I also felt for your mum, but writing about someone you know is a great idea because it is easier than having to create your own character. I really liked your use of the speech marks and the exclamation marks which shows that you really were trying your best, well done! (don't forget that I should always be a capital letter!) Miss T team 100wc
Gosh, your poor mum - I hope she was ok, Mia!
ReplyDeleteI'm really pleased that you've included some great language and have also tried to use some more complicated punctuation like speech marks - well done!
Mr K :-)
Fantastic writing Mia! Was really excited you included me in your story until i realised you had me killed off in the first few lines ;-) Keep up the hard work!
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Hi Mia
ReplyDeleteI also felt for your mum, but writing about someone you know is a great idea because it is easier than having to create your own character. I really liked your use of the speech marks and the exclamation marks which shows that you really were trying your best, well done! (don't forget that I should always be a capital letter!)
Miss T team 100wc
cool well sorta i loved it but tire to make it neater from katlyn .T.
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