I tumbled down through the sticky mud into the deep dark trench and then the noise stopped. All the explosions stopped for a moment.
I could hear my fellow soldiers above me firing their dangerous weapons at the enemy again. The explosions started and the peace had gone.
I ventured to the top of the trench and peered over the edge. My eyes met with a dreadful sight, full of death and destruction, the landscape no longer looked beautiful as it once had. I frantically started to search for my best friend John, but he was nowhere to be seen….
Lily, you are a natural writer! Your story flows with rich visuals because of your excellent descriptions. Do you also love to read? I always tell my students that good readers make good writers.
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Mrs. Peterson (Team 100WC)
TX, USA
This is a great story Lily! (This is from Ms.Stones class) It has a lot of details!
ReplyDeleteWow Lily! We enjoyed reading your tear-jerker of a 100WC.
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